"Ahmed! when did you get back man?" Yahya greeted his best friend with a big smile and a hug.
"a couple of days ago. i heard about your father..i'm really sorry. how is he?"
"thanks, he's doing a lot better now."
"Alhamdillah..guess i've been away for quite some time."
"2 years is sure a long time..so you're back for good, huh?"
"yeah! ..i've had enough of the UK. five loooong years..i'm definitely done. what about you? how's work?"
"going great. i just got promoted. about time if you ask me. i've been working there for over 12 freakin' years!"
"haha, congratulations! you deserve it."
"thanks..how's Omar doing by the way?"
"oh, pretty good for a freshman, he's been to the UK for the past three summers, he's used to it by now."
"yeah. good luck to him. so? you're not going anywhere anytime soon right?"
"nope."
"great! means you'll be coming to my wedding."
"wedding? mashallah! bu ya3qoob! mabrook!"
righ then, the thought of Layla crossed his mind..it's been a few months since they've had that fight and stopped talking to each other.
her family is pressuring her with the many proposals she's getting and every time she asks him if he's going to do something about it, he'd repeat the exact same answer "i need to start working and make my own money first.."
"i can't wait any longer. my mother is already having doubts every time i turn down a guy..and this time she's asking me to choose between two of them..and she's not taking no for an answer!"
Layla..i love you..i'm just not ready.."
he knew he's disappointed her, she wanted something solid and he couldn't give her that..not yet anyway, he wanted to be an accomplished man..someone who can provide her the same lifestyle she has.
"Ahmed?" Yahya was wondering where did his friend's mind wandered.
"i'm sorry..i'm really happy for you man..so? who are you marrying?"
"She's a Beauty! Nasser's daughter..Layla."
1983 - 4th of May
she 's been up all night, the wheels in her brain were going round and round, she felt her head about to explode!
what is it he wants now? it's been five months since she last heard from him, it was about time she moves on..
she walked to the kitchen, desperate for a cup of tea.
a few minutes later, Fatma walked in holding the little red recorder her mother gave her. although Layla wasn't really interested in Music, but she's somehow memorized a few songs her friend was playing non-stop. Fatma was a huge fan of Abu Baker Salim, but never got the lyrics right. every time she'd sing along, she'd be singing completely different words..Layla always giggled as she heard her sing in the next room.
"i want you to listen to this, you'll love it! it's just the perfect wedding song!"
ever since Layla told her about the engagement, Fatma had placed herself in charge of the wedding, and thrown herself all over the wedding plans and preparations.
"it's not until December Fatma."
"i know! but you don't want to be 'panicking' when it's too late for you to find a proper song!"
she pressed Play, and a traditional Omani wedding song came out of the little old thing.
"isn't this played in every single wedding we've been to?"
"NO! just the best weddings..what do you think? perfect right?"
Layla forced a smile of approval as she was adding sugar to her tea.
Fatma paused the song and sat silent for a minute.. "you're calling him back aren't you?"
"i...i don't know..i need to know what is it he wants."
"suit yourself..he's not bringing anything better to the table. sure, he's a looker, an engineer, and comes from a good family. but he didn't have enough guts to propose!
..she paused for a minute, grabbed a cup and poured herself some of the tea Layla has made.
then went on "Yahya is a charming man, he's just as good looking. okay, maybe life was a little rough on him, and he had to work at the age of 12. but look at him now! a permanent decent job, good salary, and he's graduating from uni in a couple of years. not to mention the sweetheart mother he has! he's got the kindest mother! you're going to have the best mother-in-law!"
"i know...but"
she took Layla's hand in hers as she said: "Layla..you're more than a sister to me, you know that. i just want you to be happy."
layla smiled. as cliché as that might have sounded, she knew Fatma was being sincere. they've known each other for as long as she can remember.
she tightened her grip on Fatma's hand. "thank you."Later that afternoon
the phone rang. Layla had what would Fatma call 'the panic look' on her face. for a second, she wished if Fatma was home to pick up the phone instead. but she went out to finish gift-shopping. after all, their plane takes off tomorrow night.
her heart was racing, and her hands were shaking as she picked up the phone.
the deep voice that has always got the butterflies fluttering in her stomach came from the other side: "Hello?"
she stood there for a few seconds..trembling.
"Hello? Layla?"
"...yes, Hello"
the were both silent for what seemed like eternity. holding her tears in..she felt as if she was suffocating. Finally he managed to speak another word.
"why?"
"...you never came.." once again they both fell into silence..
"he's my best friend.."
8 comments:
Wow? To say the least.
I admire your storytelling skills, and the captivating storyline that's filled with surprises.
Oh and you're such a tease... how many parts are there?
It sucks having to wait so eagerly to read the next part.
Encore, en-effin-core!
I agree with the last post - your story structure is great! I love the back and forth business, it keeps things alive.
If I may give one criticism though (in my humble opinion)?
If you deleted the last sentence of the first time frame "Ahmed felt..." it could give more impact to the plot twist.
:)
Keep it up!!!
anonymous thanks!
parts? hmm.. not sure.
part 3 is ready, i'm just going through it for the 10000th time, editing, adding, omitting, etc..
might be the last! =D
three-legs alice oh by all means, criticize away! i admire your writing skills. huge fan actually :p
hmm..now that you've mentioned it, i went through it again, and i think you're right. it would've gave more impact.
i think i've added the last line assuming everyone is as slow as i am. i mean, if i wasn't the one writing this, i'd be scrolling up and down until i realize it's the same Layla we're talking about. xD
again, thank you both very much. i'm more than glad you're enjoying this. i wasn't sure about going ahead and posting it the way i wrote it. i was thinking of giving the story to my sister and get it written in Arabic instead. i thought it would've given the story a greater impact, being the experienced amazing writer she is.
so this whole 'great storytelling skills' thing you guys are referring to is just insane. specially coming from you. you're both amazing articulate writers, that have always aspired me to work on my English. xD
Interesting, I liked your way and the flow of the story line.
Waiting for 3rd part :)
enjoyed it..
We want more, we want more :)
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Enough delaying part 3 already :P
Thank you everyone! =D
i'm kinda crammed with finals, packing, etc.. i was gonna post part 3 tonight, but i need to go over it with someone first.
it'll be up in a couple of days inshallah. and no i'm not delaying it on purpose :p
1st time on ur blog
Liked the story :) u got me hooked
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